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Wednesday 27 September 2017

9 Years old

My poem
When I was one,
I was dumb.
When i was two,
I was learning to walk
When i was three
I bumped into a tree
When i was four,
I was so poor
When i was five,
I was Almost alive.
When i was six,
I could fix
When i was seven,
I was dreaming of heaven
When i was eight,
I was great.
When i was nine,
I was not much more
So i think i’ll be nine now and everyday.
by:sofaia

8 comments:

  1. Hi, Sofaia, I'm Joei from Awahono School. This poem is really cool, making a poem from one to nine is really smart. This is an amazing poem and it also reminds me of a poem I made call I am... Maybe you could look on my blog and see my poem.

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  2. Hi, Sofaia,I'm Alanna from Awahono school.I really like your poem
    I think its really smart making a poem from what you've been threw in the past years it reminds me of something I made that was called about me ...... I can't wait to see you next post keep up your good work.
    -Alanna

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  3. hi Sofaia
    my name is clinton from papakura central school.
    You did a really good job i don't say you were dumb Why did you make everything rhyme
    i hope you have a good day
    from clinton :)

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  4. thanks alanna

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  5. koa sofiai
    my name is jensyn from papakura central school and i love this poem it is really funny maybe next time you could not make it when i was 1 i was dome instead like when i was 1 i sucked my thumb or something.

    whakawhetai jensyn

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  6. Hi Sofaia,it is Callum here from Waikowhai Primary School.I like how you wrote about yourself when you were young and then big and also I liked how you were rhyming the words with the numbers.It made me think of doing rhyming words about animals and suject.I have done lots of rhyming words in a poem. Maybe next time you could think of other rhyming words because I have seen lots of those words in a number rhyming poem.If you want to see my blog it is wpscallum.blogspot.com

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